Before debating about how to improve on Oscar's script, we decided to each provide our personal take on it first. This is my version of Oscar's script:
Based on an original script from Oscar Mitchell and Joanne Teo's adaptation.
ESTABLISHING SHOT: MEDIUM PROFILE SHOT OF LIVE CHARACTER SITTING ON A BED IN A DARK BEDROOM, LEGS CROSSED. CLOSE SHOT ON MP3 PLAYER THAT THEY HOLD: THE CHARACTER CHOOSES A TRACK TITLED "MEDITATION FOR BEGINNERS".
NARRATION STARTS: Hello, and welcome to this guided meditation. Find a comfortable position, sitting or lying down. Take a deep breath and allow your mind to enter a space of deep relaxation. It is very important that you clear your head from all the roaming negative thoughts. Inhale the positive energy, exhale all form of negativity.
MID CLOSEUP BIRDS EYE SHOT: WATCH CHEST TAKE DEEP BREATHS AND FACIALS RELAX AS THE BREATHING SLOWS AND THE BODY STARTS TO CALM. SHOULDERS DROP.
NARRATION CONTINUES:Scan up through your body with your mind,from your toes to the top of your head, and feel your physical body being freed from weight and released as pure energy.
FRONT MEDIUM SHOT STARTING FROM THE TOES, SLOWLY PANNING TO THE HEAD: A BLUE GLOW BEGINS TO TAKE OVER THE BODY.
FRONT WIDE SHOT: THE GLOW TAKES OVER THE ENTIRE BODY, SATURATED ON THE FOREHEAD. A PARTICLE SIMULATION ESCAPES FROM THE CHARACTER IN ONE DEEP EXHALE. CAMERA FOLLOWS AS THE PARTICLES GO TOWARDS THE CEILING, LEAVING THE ROOM. ENVIRONMENT SHIFT: FROM BEDROOM TO SPIRIT WORLD.
NEW ESTABLISHING SHOT: WIDE EXPANSE OF LAND, SERENE, CALM COLORS. IT IS FULL OF CREATURES SMALL AND ROUND, QUIET. THE CHARACTER'S NEW SHAPE FLIES THROUGH THIS NEW, UPLIFTING SPACE.
NARRATION: Remember to block all the parasite thoughts from your spirit.
THE WORDS "PARASITE THOUGHTS" ECHO MULTIPLE TIME, AS A TINNITUS-LIKE SOUND INCREASES ALONG WITH A HEARTBEAT. THE UPLIFTING NATURE OF THE LAND AND CREATURES SHIFTS INTO MOCKING WHSIPERS AND MISCHIEVOUS LAUGHS, THE COLOUR THEME DARKENS.
THE HEARTBEAT INCREASES AS THE CHARACTER'S SHAPE TRIES TO ESCAPE THE NIGHTMARISH VISION BUT THE CREATURES GRAB IT FROM ALL DIRECTIONS.
THE TINNITUS SOUND STOPS AS THE CHARACTER SUDDENLY WAKES UP COVERED IN SWEAT AND OUT OF BREATH.
CLOSE SHOT OF CHARACTER'S SHAKY HAND ON THEIR MP3 PLAYER. THE SCREEN READS "ARE YOU SURE YOU WANT TO DELETE "MEDITATION FOR BEGINNERS"?"
Monday, 29 February 2016
Schedule Simulation
To get familiar with the idea of planning schedule and the different roles that the project will require, we got examples sheets from the tutors. We also agreed that each of us will produce a simulation schedule for our own story proposition. We decided that in each of the scenarios, the director would be the person whose story was picked. My story is focused on 2D animation and this is my proposed schedule:
Idea Storyboard
Following the tutor's feedback I decided to make a storyboard to explain my idea better.
Saturday, 27 February 2016
Thursday, 25 February 2016
Feedback
The general feedback from the tutors was that my protagonist needed a clear origin. That origin could be conveyed via an outfit or a general look; for examples a very "tribal" outfit would mean that they wanted things to go back the way it was before technology, whereas a "futuristic look" would mean they wanted to make the world evolve. It was also pointed out to me that the titan's look could be reminiscent of the character's to make the relation between the two obvious. Lastly, I was suggested that if I wanted the titan to look like it was going to wipe the Earth clean (so killing everything) , designing it like a skeleton would be the best symbol to show it.
So... have a chicken!
So... have a chicken!
Script - version 1
I have picked the story I liked the most out of my 5 ideas and written a script about it. I think this story has the most potential in terms of answering the brief (dramatic background) and it would also rely on 3D (a particle simulator might help with the water if it is decided to be a 3D element) as well as 2D animation.
Script Idea
By Teahi Maiau
Version 1
Based on an original idea by Teahi Maiau.
CLOSE SHOT OF CHARACTER'S FACE, HAIR WILD IN THE WIND AND EYES GLOWING. LIGHT FLASHING ON THEIR FACE.
BACKGROUND SOUND OF WHAT PLAYS IN THEIR MIND (like a sound flashback) : PEOPLE SCREAMS AND GUNSHOTS, EXPLOSIONS, CRIES. THE SOUNDS AT THIS POINT IS FAINT AND HARD TO DISCERN.
VOICE OVER STARTS NARRATING: I was sent on this ground for a purpose. I have seen, tasted, heard and touched as much as I could. I have lived and experienced with unclouded perception, mingled in humanity and its doings.
MEDIUM LONG SHOT ON THE CHARACTER WHO IS HOLDING A CONCH SHELL.
BACKGROUND SOUND INTENSIFIES.
VOICE CONTINUES NARRATING: My mission asks of me to be the Ultimate judge.
EXT: ON A HILL FACING A LARGE BAY. A THUNDERSTORM IS TEARING THE SKY IN THE BACKGROUND WITH A BUNCH OF WATERSPOUTS.
CHARACTER CAN BE SEEN STANDING ON THE HILL, FACING THE BAY.
CHARACTER BLOWS IN THE SHELL. A VERY DEEP NOTE IS PLAYING, THE EARTH SHAKES. THE BAY WATER IS IN TURMOIL.
A GIANT CREATURE SLOWLY RISES FROM DEEP UNDER THE SEA, DRAGGING ALONG THE UNDERSEA LIFE: SAND, REEF, ALGAE, ETC. WATER DRIPS LIKE FOUNTAINS FROM ITS BROAD SHOULDERS AND A NEUTRAL GLOW COMES FROM INSIDE HIS BODY.
NARRATION: I am resolved.
CHARACTER TURNS TOWARDS THE LAND AND MARCHES FORTH, FOLLOWED BY THE COLOSSUS WHOSE GLOW TURNS RED.
note 1 - Original idea could be recorded from Devonport facing Rangitoto. It could also be in a crater like mount Eden and the beast would be terrestrial with dirt and rocks. The character and beast would then be walking towards the city instead of from sea to land.
Script Idea
By Teahi Maiau
Version 1
Based on an original idea by Teahi Maiau.
CLOSE SHOT OF CHARACTER'S FACE, HAIR WILD IN THE WIND AND EYES GLOWING. LIGHT FLASHING ON THEIR FACE.
BACKGROUND SOUND OF WHAT PLAYS IN THEIR MIND (like a sound flashback) : PEOPLE SCREAMS AND GUNSHOTS, EXPLOSIONS, CRIES. THE SOUNDS AT THIS POINT IS FAINT AND HARD TO DISCERN.
VOICE OVER STARTS NARRATING: I was sent on this ground for a purpose. I have seen, tasted, heard and touched as much as I could. I have lived and experienced with unclouded perception, mingled in humanity and its doings.
MEDIUM LONG SHOT ON THE CHARACTER WHO IS HOLDING A CONCH SHELL.
BACKGROUND SOUND INTENSIFIES.
VOICE CONTINUES NARRATING: My mission asks of me to be the Ultimate judge.
EXT: ON A HILL FACING A LARGE BAY. A THUNDERSTORM IS TEARING THE SKY IN THE BACKGROUND WITH A BUNCH OF WATERSPOUTS.
CHARACTER CAN BE SEEN STANDING ON THE HILL, FACING THE BAY.
CHARACTER BLOWS IN THE SHELL. A VERY DEEP NOTE IS PLAYING, THE EARTH SHAKES. THE BAY WATER IS IN TURMOIL.
A GIANT CREATURE SLOWLY RISES FROM DEEP UNDER THE SEA, DRAGGING ALONG THE UNDERSEA LIFE: SAND, REEF, ALGAE, ETC. WATER DRIPS LIKE FOUNTAINS FROM ITS BROAD SHOULDERS AND A NEUTRAL GLOW COMES FROM INSIDE HIS BODY.
NARRATION: I am resolved.
CHARACTER TURNS TOWARDS THE LAND AND MARCHES FORTH, FOLLOWED BY THE COLOSSUS WHOSE GLOW TURNS RED.
note 1 - Original idea could be recorded from Devonport facing Rangitoto. It could also be in a crater like mount Eden and the beast would be terrestrial with dirt and rocks. The character and beast would then be walking towards the city instead of from sea to land.
Story Ideas
I came up with log lines for 5 different story ideas, trying to pick a different genre for each one.
(HEROIC) FANTASY
Hero(ine) standing on a hill facing the ocean blows in shell/trumpet and summons a Colossal beast from the under the sea. Together they march towards the land.
SCI-FI
Hero(ine) is looking at themselves in a mirror. They stare at their reflection, seemingly troubled. They start the stretch the skin from their faces. They discover as the skin tears circuits and metal underneath, which reveals they are an android.
HORROR
In an old house Hero(ine) is being chased by ghosts/demons.
FANTASY
Kid is having a conversation with their parent and their imaginary friend(s) is commenting on the conversation but only the kid can see/hear it/them.
SPOOF HORROR
Protagonist is running through a corridor, terrified. Each door they atempt to open has a new (animated) monster behinf it. Eventually behind one of the doors is just a guy sat at his desk asking "hey.. can i help you?" but the protagonist screams in terror just like for the other doors.
(HEROIC) FANTASY
Hero(ine) standing on a hill facing the ocean blows in shell/trumpet and summons a Colossal beast from the under the sea. Together they march towards the land.
SCI-FI
Hero(ine) is looking at themselves in a mirror. They stare at their reflection, seemingly troubled. They start the stretch the skin from their faces. They discover as the skin tears circuits and metal underneath, which reveals they are an android.
HORROR
In an old house Hero(ine) is being chased by ghosts/demons.
FANTASY
Kid is having a conversation with their parent and their imaginary friend(s) is commenting on the conversation but only the kid can see/hear it/them.
SPOOF HORROR
Protagonist is running through a corridor, terrified. Each door they atempt to open has a new (animated) monster behinf it. Eventually behind one of the doors is just a guy sat at his desk asking "hey.. can i help you?" but the protagonist screams in terror just like for the other doors.
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